“All done?” Miriam poked her head into the room.
Jeremiah nodded, thumbs digging into the small of his back.
“And right on time, too!” Miriam’s pointed at the window. “Dad’s here with the van.”
“I’m off, then,” Jeremiah stated. He did his part. It was bad enough seeing his whole life folded into boxes. He didn’t need to see it all taken away.
He brushed the hair off his sweaty forehead and turned to leave.
“Forgot your phone!” Miriam exclaimed.
Jeremiah shook his head. “It’s part of this. And …” he breathed, “I won’t need it where I’m going.”
For Rochelle’s Friday Fictoneers
Photo prompt: David Stewart


Oh this is a very intriguing story Na’ama.
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Me like that you like! 😀
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Definitely 👍🏼
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😀
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Shifting is always tough.
Can relate.
He’s probably going to a very remote place where phone won’t work or perhaps he will be busy with some rigorous activity that prohibits the use of phone- like a secret service or something where they give their own phones!
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Who knows, eh? 🙂 Thanks for reading and responding!
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Na’ama Y’karah,
You left my mind spinning off in several directions. Is Jeremiah going to prison? Is he being committed to a psych ward? I’m intrigued. There’s more to this story than a paltry 100 words. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Ah, if your mind was left spinning, I did my job … 😉 here’s to ambiguity! 😀
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There are so many possibilities on where Jeremiah is going! You are an evil wench! Loved your story.
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Me? Evil???? Never …. (well … depends … 😉 )
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Just sayin’… 😉
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Shrug … I mean, I am the NYNF … so … 😉
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Right. 😏
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I wonder where he’s going
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So many possibilities, eh? Prison? Witness Protection? Deployment? Special Ops? Off-grid? Off planet? …
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I’m wondering about that last line like other readers. I’m also admiring the way you brought him to life with small gestures and details. Very good.
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Thanks, Margaret! I’m glad you liked! 🙂 And … who knows what’s next for him …eh?
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So many reasons entered my mind from simple to dire. I often feel like dumping mine in a rubbish bin!
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I know! Right??? 🙂 There was a bit of wistfulness in my writing … (even if I’m not REALLY parting with my phone at this time … 😉 )
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well, you have me intrigued! Where’s he going? I’m thinking prison, but it could be the moon!
Jen
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Could be, right? The moon? Mars? Witness Protection? Jail? Some hushed undercover what not?
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So many possibilities! We need more!
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Yeah, those 100 word thingies are very Oliver Twist … 😉
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Intriguing. I wonder where he is going? Too many possibilities.
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Where indeed? 😉 I think it is part of the mystery … jail? witness protection? mars? 😉
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You pulled me in and left me wondering. 🙂 Well written mystery. Perfect last line.
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Thank you, Brenda! I’m so glad you ‘got it’! 🙂
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Most mysterious, Na’ama. I, like everyone else, is left wondering where’s he’s off to. Nicely played!
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Thank you! 🙂 Who knows, eh? 😉
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