Home View

Bamboi

 

He huddled at the cupola and waited.

Sirens blared and klaxon warnings bleated in time with the flash of red strobe lights and a monotone woman’s voice repeating: “Evacuate! Evacuate!”

He shook his head at the cluelessness of programmers. Who chose this particular word for the code-red recordings?

Evacuate to where?

The wall behind him warped and heaved, and it was as if the very apparatus was gasping for air. He slowed his own breath and tuned out the scream of bending metal and the meaning of the accelerated frequency of the voice commands.

He glued his eyes to the view. Finally.

His finger traced the line of green against blue and traveled inland to the approximate spec that was Bamboi.

Was anyone home looking up? They’d been so proud. The first of their own at the space-station, and … for at least another moment, the last astronaut alive.

 

For the What Pegman Saw Challenge: Bamboi, Ghana

 

23 thoughts on “Home View

  1. Oh, you’ve written this so well! It’s a tremendous take on the prompt. And there are so many stories; the first astronaut from Ghana; the importance of that last view of home as he is dying; the irritation of a crass piece of programming; the break-up of the spacecraft with the death of its occupants; the pride of the astronaut’s family and neighbours. So much in 150 words! Kudos, Na’ama!

    • Thank you, Penny! 🙂 This is such a kind comment to leave! We are, all of us, such complicated beings, and so much takes place in every second … on so many layers. Most times, of course, we cannot be aware of it all or we’ll be unable to do the many mundane and not so mundane things life entails … But there are those exquisite moments (both joyful and tragic) when life slows and moments stretch and those layers are revealed more fully. I’m so glad if I managed to convey some of it in this piece! 🙂 Na’ama

    • Thanks, J! 🙂 God’s eye might zoom closer or make the whole Earth a speck in the massive universe of things … but, yes, isn’t that a sort of God’s Eye View? 🙂 I like the image! 🙂 Na’ama

  2. I really like this story. High stakes, ground control to major tom stuff. I like the details of seeing his country from space one last time, and the metal warping as he awaits death.

    You might want to check to see if you meant cupola instead of copula in the first line. 😊

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