Ablution

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Photo: Ales Krivec on Unsplash: Vintgar, Slovenia

 

The Radovna pooled itself and waited for her ablution. Still. Clear. Shattering in its beauty and perfection.

Everything she was not.

Hers was more the unfettered rush, cutting gorges, collecting all manner of debris, and lugging along tumbled things that poked their heads out of the milky froth of living.

There were no still ponds in her being.

She looked at the icicles suspended from rocks above the freezing water. They were guarding it.

From beings that did not deserve to be cleansed.

Like herself.

Hom and BorΕ‘t rose above the gorge, patient and unbending. The beech trees on the slopes, stripped bare for winter, rustled as they waited to witness her own naked skin.

Her eyes lifted to the bridge, though she expected no one on it. The area was closed to tourists in the winter. Only the locals came, alone, to seek absolution in the Radovna’s icy bowl.

 

 

For What Pegman Saw: Slovenia

 

28 thoughts on “Ablution

  1. I love this ~ Hers was more the unfettered rush, cutting gorges, collecting all manner of debris, and lugging along tumbled things that poked their heads out of the milky froth of living.

    The contrasts in your writing are splendid. Still. Clear. unfettered rush, cutting gorges. Yum

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  2. Wow, what amazing imagery and metaphor you have wrought here; it reads like poetry! And powerful emotionally as well. I can feel how corrupted she feels, how awful she sees her acts, that she requires such absolution.

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  3. You’ve written a wonderful story, Na’ama. Your concept of immersion in the winter pool to win absolution is so plausible that I went researching in Google thinking it must be true!
    Now I hope this comment will be accepted…if you see it, things are working again!

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    • Thank you, Penny! For this lovely comment (I’m sure some people someplace used immersion for absolution … as it already is used in many cultures for other forms of purification…). What a great comment!
      Thank you, also, for persisting when the commenting thing didn’t work – thank you so much for letting me know through the ‘contact’ button, because it allowed me to become aware of the issue, and allowed WP to fix it. You’re a hero! πŸ™‚

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